Comments for Fictionique http://fictionique.com The world in our own words. Sat, 19 May 2012 22:01:29 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1.4 Comment on There They Go by Jerry DeNuccio http://fictionique.com/?p=14210#comment-6990 Jerry DeNuccio Sat, 19 May 2012 22:01:29 +0000 http://fictionique.com/?p=14210#comment-6990 I loved this, Steve. It made me think of something Emerson says about how when we travel we all too often forget that we bring along the same old selves. This is a sly story, critical of a certain class of people, critical of the cultural forces that shape or valuing, without being militant or overheated about it--a kind of soft-spoken polemic. And you have a great eye for characterizing detail, as with this: "drinking sun-brewed iced tea, a single mint leaf from their herb garden floating in each cup." I loved this, Steve. It made me think of something Emerson says about how when we travel we all too often forget that we bring along the same old selves. This is a sly story, critical of a certain class of people, critical of the cultural forces that shape or valuing, without being militant or overheated about it–a kind of soft-spoken polemic. And you have a great eye for characterizing detail, as with this: “drinking sun-brewed iced tea, a single mint leaf from their herb garden floating in each cup.”

]]> Comment on Pilot by Jerry DeNuccio http://fictionique.com/?p=14128#comment-6989 Jerry DeNuccio Sat, 19 May 2012 21:47:43 +0000 http://fictionique.com/?p=14128#comment-6989 Naomi: You created a character that absolutely fascinated me. But what I really like is how you gave her complexity--this, for instance: "The boyfriend didn’t deserve this – he was a good man. She hated him for being decent." The heart in conflict with itself. The desperate need for attention from an authority, even one whose name she cannot remember. The idea of hating someone for being decent--so against the grain, yet so understandable, so right, given the character you created. Naomi: You created a character that absolutely fascinated me. But what I really like is how you gave her complexity–this, for instance: “The boyfriend didn’t deserve this – he was a good man. She hated him for being decent.” The heart in conflict with itself. The desperate need for attention from an authority, even one whose name she cannot remember. The idea of hating someone for being decent–so against the grain, yet so understandable, so right, given the character you created.

]]> Comment on Pilot by ChicagoGuy http://fictionique.com/?p=14128#comment-6988 ChicagoGuy Sat, 19 May 2012 20:03:28 +0000 http://fictionique.com/?p=14128#comment-6988 OK this is NOT a chick piece. I hate chick pieces and this kept me going to the end. Like Lee, I guessed "quiet desperation." Course maybe that's just me. . .wait. . .that is a chick piece comment for a very well crafted, engaging story. OK I gotta go watch a rugby game and have a beer now. OK this is NOT a chick piece. I hate chick pieces and this kept me going to the end. Like Lee, I guessed “quiet desperation.”

Course maybe that’s just me. . .wait. . .that is a chick piece comment for a very well crafted, engaging story.

OK I gotta go watch a rugby game and have a beer now.

]]> Comment on Big Head and the Iroquois by ChicagoGuy http://fictionique.com/?p=14222#comment-6987 ChicagoGuy Sat, 19 May 2012 19:58:20 +0000 http://fictionique.com/?p=14222#comment-6987 Lee this is fascinating. Makes me want to know more. And ain't that always the real test? Lee this is fascinating. Makes me want to know more. And ain’t that always the real test?

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